NaPoWriMo #11 – “Surprise” Ending

Welcome to Writing Prompt Pit Stop! It’s Day 11 of NaPoWriMo already, and today’s prompt was an interesting one. It’s supposed to be a detailed poem about an object or a place, and then have more of an abstract or a “surprise” ending. I wasn’t sure what to write about to create such an effect, but decided to go with one of my nature themes…and the surprise may be that I wrote it in the first place, since it’s nothing that I really want to see happen…with that said, I’m posting my 11th poem for National Poetry Month, “The Bird Feeder,” and directly following is the original prompt. Enjoy…maybe…!

The Bird Feeder

The radiant goldfinch, a joy
to see, so sleek, so bright
as if cast in a spotlight:
the shining star,
among the more muted
song sparrows. He chirps
his solos in between hearty
beaks full of Nyjar seed, some
he shuffles off the edges
of the little wooden perch,
such a master of dance, full of life,
then the calm, dead silence –
those vibrant yellow feathers
floating in the sudden breeze
left behind by a hungry hawk.

The Prompt from NaPoWriMo for Day 11:

Today, I challenge you to write a poem in which you closely describe an object or place, and then end with a much more abstract line that doesn’t seemingly have anything to do with that object or place, but which, of course, really does. I think of the “surprise” ending to this James Wright Poem as a model for the effect I’m hoping you’ll achieve. An abstract, philosophical kind of statement closing out a poem that is otherwise intensely focused on physical, sensory details.

As always, if you get a poem that you’d like to share – leave it in the comments below.

Keep writing,


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